开局的引入不用拖拖拉拉给人云里来雾里去的感觉，直接交待“笔者要干嘛“就行了。

Lexis的雕琢不要刻意为了用词而用词，用得恰如其分就好，prevail,suffice你品品。

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Surroundedbyvariousnews,especiallythemarketplacegossip,mostofusmayberatherconcernedwiththeinsandoutsofourownrealestate.Anordinarymurdercasethathasbeenconductedinacommunity,ifdeliberatelyexaggerated,mayeasilystirusup,drivingustoardentlyprobeintothehistoryofthiscommunity,andsuchexplorationgoesbeyond.Certainly,thereareeitherinstanceswhereahouse,aftermeticulousinvestigation,turnsouttobeaformerresidenceofacelebrityorinstanceswhereabuildingfinallyprovestobeamemorialtoaparticularpersonorahistoricevent.Thiscanallbeattributedtopeople’syearningfornovelties.Ihavealsobeento‘NewPlace’,theworld-renowneddwellingofWilliamShakespeareinStratford,where,onanannualbasis,millionsofpatronsarefascinatedbythefineartsoftragedies;Istillfeelperplexedwhythisliterarylion,whoisnotsowell-educated,isabletomakeitrightHERE,andthiscuriosityalwaysactsasanincentivetopayanothervisit.

首二句以“事件感“代入去回应人们的猎奇心理，这也是一种*常见的写作手法;

本段二三句中出现的语法现象值得一提：if从句的省略现象作插入语，后面therebe句型中嵌套了either…or…的句间平行结构(而且是从句的呼应平行)。还是非常建议同学们背诵及模仿使用的。如果句法不懂，就问你的写作老师吧;

本段的头两个句子的syntacticstructure都十分高能，做好解构和模仿工作吧?定、状从用得好，你就能领略到写作*的蔚然大观;

“Thiscanbeattributedto……“长句子之后嵌入一个短句。前面的句子内部信息较为密集，需要在此处刹个车、缓一下信息流淌速度，使得文章有张有弛;

机考已成大势所趋，一不小心就敲多了，但表意清晰、句子水平，*会愿意读下去的，全文300字出头的文章笔者考场亲测有效，放心写，别跑题就成。同学们也可以读一下C16T3后面官方附赠的sampleanswer,也是350words+，也不失为一篇不错的文章，分数不高，但是道理讲明白了就成。

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Astotheresearchmethods,readingmaterialsorsearchinformationonlineisacommonplace.Moreprecisely,itisduetothewell-establisheddatabaseformedthroughgeographicallinksthatapersoncaneasilygettothebottomofsuchresidence,aslongasitisnotsorareandobscure.Bytheway,duringthetrip,Ialsotalkedalotwithsomeseniortownsmenwhohavealreadyfamiliarizedthemselveswiththesurroundings,andtheirjocularremarksshedapositivelightonmymisgivings.

Lexis:如果你的作文要7+，那么lesscommonvocabulary,compound,andidiomaticexpressions必不可少，如：well-established,gettothebottomof,familiarizesb.withsth.,shedlighton,jocularremarks等等;还有那个rareandobscure看见了么，修辞中的押尾韵(consonance)。

TR:“达意”(or“表意功能”)永远是雅思写作语言关的*要义，追求极简与自然即可。

Conclusion

Inconclusion,Iarguethatthemainreasonispeople’scuriosity,nomatteritisforautilitarianorunconsciouspurpose,andthatthemethodshavebeendetailedabove.

只要实现了表意功能，结尾偷懒又如何?笔者也就推荐一句复合句完结就好。笔力不够就拆成两句也罢。