5月23日的雅思写作考了久违的报告类话题,上海朗阁教育徐祎娇老师预测中了题目哦!
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5.23雅思写作真题解析-余曰简
05-23 报告类题型–犯罪话题
In many parts of theworld, children and teenagers are committing more crimes. Why do you think thisis the case? How should children and teenagers be punished?
题目大意:
全球青少年犯罪增加。原因?应该怎样惩罚?
关键词+思路:
childrenand teenagers + crimes: 青年犯罪是抽象概念,要找具体的原因,就要对其予以具体化,到底是怎样的犯罪行为;涉及青年的犯罪一般可以分为2种,1)暴力犯罪(打架斗殴);2)经济犯罪(偷,抢);有了具体的犯罪行为,才可以倒推出各自不同的成因;
暴力犯罪:可以归咎于媒体的影响;经济犯罪:归咎于贫穷,生计所迫;
bepunished: 同理,惩罚也是一个抽象概念,只有在罪行具体化之后,才能有相应的措施
针对少年暴力犯罪和经济犯罪,各自提出不同的措施
提纲梳理如下:
范文
It is true that there is an increasing trend of juvenile delinquency in many countries nowadays. While various hypotheses have been put forward to explain this phenomenon, I would say that this problem can be mainly attributed to the poverty and influences of media, and multiple measures needs to be carried out to curb this tendency.
Out of all the factors,poverty stands out as the first culprit contributing to the growing youth crimes rate. Children who live in poverty are less likely to have access to good schools, which means that many of them lack the minimum degrees and vocational skills to make a living, and therefore might embark on the path of crimes like stealing and robbery for livelihood. Another causation we cannot afford to ignore is the detrimental influence of movies and video games which are saturated with violence. A long exposure to such entertainments inevitably leads to aggressive behaviors, given that adolescents are more susceptible to the false values behind the media.
When it comes to the punishment of youth offenders, I would recommend a combination of incarceration and rehabilitation. For those violent lawbreakers who threat the public safety,confinement is a necessity to isolate them from endangering the life of others. Meanwhile, for those minor criminal offenders due to livelihood, I would recommend a sentence of community service coupled with vocational trainings if possible, which is conducive to reintegrate them into society and therefore live a settled life.
In conclusion, it looks to me that the pervasive juvenile delinquency is a complicated problem that iscorrelated to the poverty and media influence,and accordingly a multiple punishment of confinement and education to tackle this issue.
相关词汇:
Juvenile delinquency 少年犯罪
Hypothesis 推论
Be attributed to 归咎于
Combination 组合
Curb 遏制
Culprit 罪魁祸首
Causation 原因
Afford 承受
Be saturated with 充斥
Adolescents 少年
Susceptible 易受影响的
Incarceration 拘禁
Rehabilitation 改造
Reintegrate 重新融入
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